The topic for this month’s blog post is about words. How
does word choice develop a story’s character? How do you use and select your
words?
Wow and double-wow!
Our stories are composed of words, and how do we select among the 25,000 to
35,000 words in the writer’s vocabulary?
Let’s break this down into describing someone who is angry.
Jack is irked.
Jack is pissed.
Jack is mad as hell.
Jack is batshit.
Jack’s face is crimson and he looks like he’s going to
explode.
Jack feels a boiling thermonuclear rage tripped to explode.
Not only does each sentence tell us something about Jack,
but it also says something about the author. “Pissed” and “batshit” are current
colloquial expressions, not likely to be used by an elderly writer. Also they
are “telling” us how Jack feels. Jack feels a “boiling thermonuclear rage”
shows us, as does Jack’s face is crimson and he looks like he’s going to
explode.” We could write 20 more sentence to indicate Jack is angry, and each
one would have a different degree of anger and be in a different voice.
Just this week, I re-read The Great Gatsby for perhaps the fourth or fifth time, but for the
first time as a writer. Fitzgerald’s
long, beautiful, literary sentences blew me away, but not everyone in my book
club liked them. “Too long, ” and
“Too slow to get going,” were two of the comments. The moral of this is that not everyone
will be thrilled by your words. Words become “voice,” and every character in a
story has a voice. The words a
character speaks and thinks betray his or her character.
How do I select my words? As a former English major who,
back in the day, was immersed is the classics of literature, from Homer and
Shakespeare to James Joyce and ee cummings, I know a lot of words. My parents were from different parts of
the country and they had their own words and sayings. When we were in a grimy
industrial part of town, my mother would exclaim that we were “in the vinegar works.” I still say
that. When my dad had difficulty with a task, he would mutter that “it’s too wet to plow.” He also spoke of someone who had gotten
rich or had good luck as being “in tall cotton.” I love these old expressions
that are still in our language. Expressions from the farm are great for a rural
character—they really say a lot about him or her in a few words. So I try to write dialogue that my character
would actually use, keeping in mind that even a character who was a total bore
would have some felicities of speech. His speech needn’t be boring. The French have a phrase for using the right word. They call it
le mot juste.
At my first writer’s conference, an author (literary)
advised us against using words like “ensconced,” because they sound kind of,
well, high-falutin. (Another good word). If you’re writing a gritty mystery,
the language will be much different than a romance for the Christian market. Some
readers will put down a book at the first hint of profanity. Others will put it
down if a street cop says, “gosh darn.” There you go. The words have to be right
for the characters, the story and the market you’re writing for. Sometimes it’s a high-wire act.
Sometimes it’s a crapshoot. As writer’s we choose our words with care. They do
a lot of heavy lifting.
The great authors listed below all have something to say
about choosing words this week. We all have different ideas. Read on!
Skye Taylor http://www.skye-writer.com/blogging_by_the_sea
Marci Baun http://www.marcibaun.com/blog/
Margaret Fieland http://margaretfieland.wordpress.com
Victoria Chatham http://victoriachatham.blogspot.ca
Beverley Bateman http://beverleybateman.blogspot.ca/
Dr. Bob Rich http://wp.me/p3Xihq-OB
Rachael Kosinski http://rachaelkosinski.weebly.com/
Helena Fairfax http://www.helenafairfax.com
A.J. Maguire http://ajmaguire.wordpress.com/
Rhobin Courtright http://www.rhobinleecourtright.com
Marci Baun http://www.marcibaun.com/blog/
Margaret Fieland http://margaretfieland.wordpress.com
Victoria Chatham http://victoriachatham.blogspot.ca
Beverley Bateman http://beverleybateman.blogspot.ca/
Dr. Bob Rich http://wp.me/p3Xihq-OB
Rachael Kosinski http://rachaelkosinski.weebly.com/
Helena Fairfax http://www.helenafairfax.com
A.J. Maguire http://ajmaguire.wordpress.com/
Rhobin Courtright http://www.rhobinleecourtright.com
Strait forward with good examples and well explained; enjoyed your post.
ReplyDeleteI really loved this post! I also never heard of the phrases you mentioned your parents saying. Very interesting!
ReplyDeleteExcellent list of options to show how Jack is angry. The English language has so many options to describe the same emotion, thought, etc and we tend to focus on just a few, but the variety gives more depth to the writing.
ReplyDeleteI still use some expressions that are uncommon to Los Angeles because I come from the Central Valley. It's a more rural, country existence, although I didn't grow up on a farm. One of my favorite expressions I use at swim practice to describe someone who starts out fast leading the lane and dies after a few sets is to compare them to a ruptured duck. This never fails to make my lane mates laugh, but it's a perfect description in just a few words. (I inherited that saying from my mother.)
ReplyDeleteExcellent post.
Marci
I enjoyed all your examples of Jack's anger. Also that you use dialogue to help develop and distinguish your characters.
ReplyDeleteJudy, your parents' sayings are completely new to me, but were expressive and gave me the intended meaning. Perhaps we need a dictionary for such turns of phrase for everywhere!
ReplyDeleteSometimes, I use an Australian phrase, and am surprised that people of slightly different culture don't understand. This is another reason for beta readers.
:)
Bob